Quite frankly, I think this is terrible, especially considering your other works. You write well and could have done much better given the wonderful picture you had at your disposal. There was clearly a change of the mindset of the person being transformed into a woman, but without describing it or any internal conflict, and cutting straight to the end with a slutty mindset pre embedded outside of the reader's view there is no difference in just taking a picture of a slutty ciswoman and writing about how much of a slut she is. In short, in my opinion, I think you skipped the juicy bits.
I think your criticism is fair - I wouldn't call it one of my better works. But some of that is because I intentionally wanted to do a caption that focuses exclusively on how slutty some of the bimbos turn out to be - other writers do it quite well and I wanted to try...perhaps not to the best of my abilities, but an attempt nevertheless.Thank you for your critique - I really appreciate the dialogue-Elena Starz